NaPoWriMo Day 8: Rewriting Phenomenal Woman by Maya Angelou

Day 8/282

Now Day eight’s poem is supposed to be a rewrite of a famous poem, for which I chose Phenomenal Woman by Maya Angelou, more so I had an excuse to share this amazing poem than anything.  So forgive my mangled attempt at a rewrite and enjoy Maya’s words!

 

When I fret about
the span of my hips
the ride of my breasts
not built to suit a fashion model’s size

I remind myself
it’s the fire in my eyes
the swing in my waist
and the joy in my feet
my inner mystery

From one phenomenal woman
to another; Maya Angelou
phenomenally
phenomenal woman
thank you

Now for the real thing:

Phenomenal Woman

Pretty women wonder where my secret lies.
I’m not cute or built to suit a fashion model’s size
But when I start to tell them,
They think I’m telling lies.
I say,
It’s in the reach of my arms
The span of my hips,
The stride of my step,
The curl of my lips.
I’m a woman
Phenomenally.
Phenomenal woman,
That’s me.

I walk into a room
Just as cool as you please,
And to a man,
The fellows stand or
Fall down on their knees.
Then they swarm around me,
A hive of honey bees.
I say,
It’s the fire in my eyes,
And the flash of my teeth,
The swing in my waist,
And the joy in my feet.
I’m a woman
Phenomenally.
Phenomenal woman,
That’s me.

Men themselves have wondered
What they see in me.
They try so much
But they can’t touch
My inner mystery.
When I try to show them
They say they still can’t see.
I say,
It’s in the arch of my back,
The sun of my smile,
The ride of my breasts,
The grace of my style.
I’m a woman

Phenomenally.
Phenomenal woman,
That’s me.

Now you understand
Just why my head’s not bowed.
I don’t shout or jump about
Or have to talk real loud.
When you see me passing
It ought to make you proud.
I say,
It’s in the click of my heels,
The bend of my hair,
the palm of my hand,
The need of my care,
‘Cause I’m a woman
Phenomenally.
Phenomenal woman,
That’s me.

Maya Angelou
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5 thoughts on “NaPoWriMo Day 8: Rewriting Phenomenal Woman by Maya Angelou

  1. That is just amazing! And thank you for sharing the original as well! It was a superb read! 🙂

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  4. shannabeale says:

    So tragic to hear of Maya Angelou’s death. My condolences to those who knew her. She has inspired generations and her legacy will live on in her words and continue to inspire.

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